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    Man Oh man.....*shakes head*

    This isn't the end, right???
    Very well written, even if it is so depressingly depressing. There is a part four, isn't there? Isn't there?

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    man, note to self don't read this when you are about to go to work...... Gah it was so sad, but beautiful....... Excuse me while i go redue my makeup for work.......


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    Oh my god...
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    Oh my god...
    This was so beautiful...
    But so sad!!! :crygreen: I'm all depressed now!!!!
    Please update soon and let Chloe be ok !!!!!
    And remind me to not read sad story anymore ! it's very not good for my mood!!!! i'm all sad now!!!! :crygreen:
    Again great job!

    Julie

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    I suppose I shouldn't leave a nice, detailed review about what happens, huh? :biggrin: Okay, you know I love it. Now post more.

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    I need tissue. Damn it. :crygreen:

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    They never found her body! In my book, that means she not dead and until you produce a body I'm staunchly gonna believe that she's still alive! Why did the men attack her, I have a feeling that there was something more behind it, what was their motivation? The flashbacks to her last moments were just so heartwrenching! And I have to say that the dream within the dream was evil! You gave me false hope! How could you? I need more of this ASAP!!!

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    I took your advice and played the song while I read... it heightened every thing and made it that much more gut wrenching!! ack!!

    fantasic job

    *sobs*

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    Re: My Last Breath (R) (Completed) - Part 3, 'Always With You' series

    Damnit! I should have known nothing that good was going to last. *grumbles* Especially when I saw the “angst” classification not to mention the song choice.

    This part is beautifully written though (despite the depressing content). You blended flashbacks with the present and the song lyrics really well and I didn’t have any trouble following what was happening. It didn’t jump around too much to lose me. Good job.

    I also like that the story started on such a light note and didn’t automatically fall into the ultra-depressing Chloe-could-be-dead mode. It makes the shock of what happens later that much more intense. I really liked it.

    Good job on this, I can’t wait to read the next one. And thanks.

    txalb

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    Re: My Last Breath (R) (Completed) - Part 3, 'Always With You' series

    Oh man, I so shouldn't read this stuff when I'm tired... It was all I could do to hold back the tears... The song lyrics fit in perfectly with the scene, OMG; in fact, they were a big part of what almost made me cry... Poor Lex, all alone now...

    Do'

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    Re: My Last Breath (R) (Completed) - Part 3, 'Always With You' series

    this is so sad i just felt the tears in my eyes i hope chloe is ok and will get back to lex because they deserve to be happy and that dream was horrible please don't let it come true.

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